An urge of a thirsty girl

Neha Dwivedi  By Neha Dwivedi , 18th Jul 2011 | Follow this author | RSS Feed
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There are places where people don't get rain for days.Here in this poem i have tried to describe the emotions of a girl who is longing for rain.

waiting for rain!

Looking up in the sky,i long for rain
not for getting drenched but for little grain
i moved towards the hill in hope
did i get something,nope!
but i still waited with resistance
which rather required a lot of patience;
enough had been enough i thought
i got up to go away,this was what i sought;
but then someone ceased me
saying success would be at my step,it rather teased me
with anger i shouted, i have waited for days
control dear there are many more ways
the anger in me kept evolving as i cried
but he stood there itself with pacifying words of pride;
and when all my hope had dampened
some kind of miracle happened
cracking,thundering it suddenly started raining
i had got success as he was claiming
"see i said you"is what he said
"thank you" is what my mouth could get!

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Drink, Farm, Farming, Miracle, Miracles, Rain, Raindrops, Rainfall, Rainy Day, Rainy Days, Rainy Season

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author avatar Neha Dwivedi
Hello people ! I am a student whose aim is to become a professional writer .I love writing all kinds of stuff but what interests me the most is poetry . Hope you all enjoy my writing (Neha Dwivedi )

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author avatar Steve Kinsman
19th Jul 2011 (#)

Very cute poem, geeta. Thanks for sharing it.

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author avatar Neha Dwivedi
19th Jul 2011 (#)

my pleasure steve and thanks a lot for your wonderful compliment.

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author avatar Retired
19th Jul 2011 (#)

Nice tug a war between the boy and girl...
You do write well, develop on it, you can perfect your skill...

Did you know Aiyanna means the Eternal Flower that is Forever waiting for the Rain... It lives forever devoid of shower... Its part of the legend and is Red Indian...

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author avatar adamrs
19th Jul 2011 (#)

Nice perfect!

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author avatar Buzz
19th Jul 2011 (#)

Lovely poetry, geeta. Great share.

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author avatar Neha Dwivedi
19th Jul 2011 (#)

thanks aiyanna and yes aiyanna indeed has a very beautiful meaning.

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author avatar Neha Dwivedi
19th Jul 2011 (#)

thank you adamrs and buzz for your comments.

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author avatar Dia Shah
19th Jul 2011 (#)

good share geeta. itni baarish to ati h naha liya kar moti..!!

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author avatar Neha Dwivedi
19th Jul 2011 (#)

thanks hemlata...oye mai apni baat nahi kar rahi...yeh baarish ka hi asar hai ki zukham picha nahi chod raha

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author avatar Songbird B
20th Jul 2011 (#)

What a wonderful poem, Geeta...I really liked this..

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author avatar Neha Dwivedi
20th Jul 2011 (#)

glad you like it songbird and thanks a lot for comment...

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author avatar Denise O
21st Jul 2011 (#)

Very nice Geeta. Thank you for sharing.:)

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author avatar Neha Dwivedi
21st Jul 2011 (#)

my pleasure denise....thank you for posting your precious comment...

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author avatar Phoenix Montoya
22nd Jul 2011 (#)

Beautiful lines, very well expressed, thanks.

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author avatar Neha Dwivedi
22nd Jul 2011 (#)

thank you phoenix for your beautiful compliment...

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author avatar Carol Kinsman
22nd Jul 2011 (#)

Sweet poem...Thank you, Geeta.

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author avatar Neha Dwivedi
23rd Jul 2011 (#)

thank you carol for your valuable comment..

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author avatar ASHRAF
24th Jul 2011 (#)

nice poem , u could improvise it a further more.
like instead of using ceased to indicate the verb u wud like to use seized. similarly your idea is great but you should use some more impulsive words (not complicated). Just put the right words in the right place and u get a great poem of yours. Gud work :)

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author avatar Neha Dwivedi
24th Jul 2011 (#)

thanks a lot ashraf for making me aware of my mistakes....i would surely heed to your advice...

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author avatar Neha Dwivedi
24th Jul 2011 (#)

thanks a lot ashraf for making me aware of my mistakes....i would surely heed to your advice...

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