Just Try Harder to See Me

mountainside By mountainside, 10th Jan 2011 | Follow this author | RSS Feed
Posted in Wikinut>Writing>Poetry

It takes two caring people to have a relationship.

I'm Trying, Why Aren't you?

I can see you, but tell me,
Can you see me?
Do you see that I have needs?
A crumb here and a crumb there,
Does not a loaf make.
It's just not enough,
When I look for you,
But you are not there.
What good is being
With someone,
Who is really not there.
Even when your body,
Is physically present,
There is only the body,
You are not even here.
Stop it with the selfishness,
Or perhaps you're
Just too self absorbed.
Too wrapped up in you,
That you are unable
To be sensitive,
To truly care, to share.
It may be that the
Mirror is your best friend.
It might just happen that way,
Where it will wind up,
Being just you and
Your very lovely mirror.

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Absorbed, Crumb, Friend, Learn, Mirror, Needs, See, Selfishness, Share

Meet the author

author avatar mountainside
I am an artist, I paint abstract pictures and draw. I like to write, read and watch game shows. I like nice people and love to learn about diffeent cultures. Keeping an open mind is important to me.

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author avatar angelnjuly
11th Jan 2011 (#)

Beautifully written. A true art. Thank you for the share.

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author avatar mountainside
11th Jan 2011 (#)

...Hi angel, your comment is well received, thank you so much. Take care.

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author avatar Denise O
12th Jan 2011 (#)

Nice one mountain, I mean, a in your face, tell it like it is poem...love it.
Thank you for sharing.:)

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author avatar mountainside
12th Jan 2011 (#)

Hey Denise, Being honest might just save the day. "o)
Thanks for your nice comment.

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author avatar Blunt Head
19th Jan 2011 (#)

So you're a poet...I am too. I like your flow.

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author avatar mountainside
19th Jan 2011 (#)

Hi there. Welll sort of. Thank you. Take care.

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author avatar D in The Darling
20th Mar 2011 (#)

Didn't I tell you that you're great?
This is beautiful. I understand you. You're speaking my language. Thanks for sharing.

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author avatar mountainside
20th Mar 2011 (#)

...dinthedarling, you flatter me. Thank you. You are the great one, your writing is superb. Take care.

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