Keith, The Boy Who Never Brushed his teeth

The Rose that grew By The Rose that grew, 17th Oct 2012 | Follow this author | RSS Feed | Short URL http://nut.bz/28aupapr/
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My favorite children's author is Roald Dahl. I based this children's rhyme on what I have learnt from his work especially the classic Revolting Rhymes. I really hope to have a collection of children's rhymes and stories to publish one day.- We can all dream......

Remember to always brush your teeth

I remember when i was young,

Our summer time had just begun.

My mother would take me to the park on some days

Where my friends and I would climb and play,

This one day we went,

I met a boy named Keith.

I thought that he was rather nice,

until he grinned and showed his teeth,

Now i am not one to pick holes

and i hesitate to tell

but; you see

This little chaps breath did rather smell!

Okay, I just can't lie,

It stunk!

I thought that i had met a skunk,

Well i wasn't a girl taught to be rude,

but i set my sights on this mouth full of food,

From the week before,

When he had Chinese ordered to his front door,

There was noodles hanging from his smile,

He had yellow teeth they looked so vile,

He had chicken pieces hanging from the front

where he had just eaten lunch.

I used to hear his mother say:

If that boy of mine doesn't soon brush his teeth,

He is not having anything to eat

He can holler he can cry ,

I will not give up until he tries

So she put the rules down to little Keith,

"No more food! until you brush your teeth."

She hid the chocolate, she locked up the treats.

She even sowed up last years Christmas sweets.

There was no longer any food in the house,

Not even enough for a tiny mouse,

Not a speckle not a crumb.

"Oh mum" Keith cried."what have you done?"

She replied "I told you- my boy once before,

I'm not going to tell you anymore."

Keith looked at his mother , he looked in shock

he just couldn't bare the thought of not eating chocs.

He stood in the bathroom, he gazed in the mirror,

"Oh my gosh" he cried, "I can see my dinner!"

The little boy began to scrub and brush,

He tried so hard to remove the slush,

Up and down then side to side,

He soaked his yellow pegs in mint fluoride.

He smiled in the mirror for further inspection,

Happy with his new found refection,

He realised his mothers words were so right.

For Keith's teeth were now gleaming white.

Now if you don't want a yellow smile like Keith,

Remember to always brush your teeth!

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author avatar Terry Trainor
17th Oct 2012 (#)

I wish I was a toothbrush

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author avatar Sivaramakrishnan A
17th Oct 2012 (#)

Humorous but with a clear message. Thanks for the share - siva

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author avatar LOVERME
17th Oct 2012 (#)


you say you are the rose that grew
I would like to rename you
and that's true….
you are a rosy petal of toothpaste
I’d love to taste
and now I’d envy Keith
for your tooth paste
in his holey teeth….
you have spread like you say
the rose that grew
wow, I now say the rose has grown
come on lads clap
the rose grew
and
upon lovely teeth
the yellow smile was washed away
rosy white teeth now Kieth- like kids
all did display
yes I know man!
roses are red
but white roses bloom often
in mouths instead

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author avatar Sherry Kell
17th Oct 2012 (#)

lovely, thank you very much! You have a rare talent

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author avatar Sherry Kell
17th Oct 2012 (#)

lovely, thank you very much! You have a rare talent

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author avatar Judy Ellen
17th Oct 2012 (#)

Great poem for a children's book! I hope you get the recognition your deserve!

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author avatar The Rose that grew
17th Oct 2012 (#)

Thank you all for your kind comments. I hope one day my poetry blooms like a rose. Thank you so much Loverme, your poetry also inspires me to keep writing. You are a brilliant writer.

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author avatar Lady Aiyanna
18th Oct 2012 (#)

Little boy grew up to say,
My bad breath did go away.
He ate the candies he loved most,
And to the whole world he raised toast.
For he was the star they waited for,
Smelly as they called him began to soar.
For he got caught not bathing one day,
Till his mother caught him and took those clothes away.
That was when he was left with no choice,
To have a bath and come looking nice.
With pants pleats looking razor sharp,
A voice so melodious like a harp.
He stepped back into the world once more,
Made his way to the record store.
Behind the scene he did confide,
He hated public appearances and wanted to hide.
So that was it he made himself sparse,
A lot of wealth he did then amass.
To Heal the world using charity,
With anthems of joy and integrity.
Till he felt the pressure and got a wife,
Who brought pain and put him through strife.
Taking away his peace inside,
While she got off for yet another ride.
Then the other provided him kids,
But with a big story under lids.
That was the painful moment in dawn,
Who wept and cried till early morn.
For she had lost her truest love,
To the vicious game playing dove.
And had to fight hard to win him back,
To get his life all back on track.
For she went and pulled him from swirling tide,
The hurt and pain developing inside.
To give him hope for a comeback,
To get his bedraggled life now back on track.
She pulled out all the pain one by one,
Presented me with moon and Sun.
While I took her to live again with the stars,
Showering her with my personal eternal flowers.
For she never asked to comeback,
But just went and got me back on track.
When it was time to leave I chose to stay,
While everyone else in that world went away.
Creating a ripple that caused the wave,
Bringing back anthem of Love you Save.
Pulling in the love that I had in heart,
We are together forever never to part.

By Anisha Achankunju (C) Lady Aiyanna 19th October 2012

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author avatar BOB the DOG
23rd Oct 2012 (#)

Yuk!!! I love this. It should be on every bathroom door to remind the kids to clean their teeth. Well done.x

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author avatar karasiwo23
22nd Dec 2012 (#)

lovely , i like this :)

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