Laconical

Rathnashikamani By Rathnashikamani, 9th Apr 2011 | Follow this author | RSS Feed | Short URL http://nut.bz/1p05xuio/
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This an experimental poem with multiple rhyming words coming one over the other in the next line in every stanza.

Every stanza conveys a philosophical message.

Laconical


The green that shines avid in the leaf
is the spleen that refines the Red in thy Life.

The bush that abounds with little bloom
is the flesh that binds on thy skeletal frame.

The light that looms from suns of sky
is the sight that zooms from lens of eye.

The force that holds water onto this Earth
is the source that molds matter into all Birth.

The wind that grows wild from northern pole
is the kind that flows mild in breathing soul.

The word that is not spoken of and spared
is the sword that is not taken off and feared.

The flame that burns from volcanic peaks
is the same that churns from laconic sparks.

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author avatar Retired
9th Apr 2011 (#)

Interesting rhyme scheme!

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
10th Apr 2011 (#)

Thanks Rama Devi.

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author avatar joan marie
9th Apr 2011 (#)

Great write! Clever having the middle words rhyming. jm

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
10th Apr 2011 (#)

There are four rhyming words in each line.

This prosaic technique is very popular in Telugu poetry.

Thanks for the appreciation.

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
10th Apr 2011 (#)

I mean prosodic - NOT prosaic. sorry.

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author avatar foxpete88
9th Apr 2011 (#)

nicely...thanks for sharing

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
10th Apr 2011 (#)

foxpete,
Thanks and nice to see you after a long time.

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author avatar Songbird B
10th Apr 2011 (#)

Unusual and clever...I liked this very much, my friend. I really enjoy your poetry, Rathnashikamani....

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
10th Apr 2011 (#)

Thank you Songbird. I'm blessed.

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author avatar Retired
10th Apr 2011 (#)

Exceptional poetry here. Very well done indeed. Thanks!

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
10th Apr 2011 (#)

Thanks Mike, I'm honored by your kind comments.

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author avatar Delicia Powers
11th Apr 2011 (#)

Love the rhyme pattern, beautiful work, thank you!

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
13th Apr 2011 (#)

I worked on this poem very carefully, though I couldn't place the most suitable rhyming words.
Thanks Delicia!

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author avatar ppruel
25th Jan 2012 (#)

Very good. You're too clever dude. I liked it and I might apply it too...LOL.

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author avatar Pragnesh Shah
31st May 2019 (#)

Do not limit, explore more

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