Loss of me 6 feet Underground

Shaunak By Shaunak, 7th Dec 2011 | Follow this author | RSS Feed | Short URL http://nut.bz/88i49k_z/
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Another Sad and Dark poem. A lover is dying for his love

Loss of me 6 feet Underground

Late at night as i lay in bed,
Millions of thoughts rush through my head
And instead of falling asleep i begin to cry.
Thinking about how hard i try.
The long night of darkness has arrived,
As i sleep alone in the prism of my mind

All the love I gave that was never returned,
Now only thing left is the heart you broke and burned.
All I see is destruction and death,
This is who i am after you left.
Losing everything that once made my wealth,
As you all sit back and wait for my last breath

I'm fading
no one is waking
To grieve the taking of me above ground
Do you hear the sound
My breaths are falling all around
Instead of mourn you crown
The loss of me 6 feet underground

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author avatar Buzz
8th Feb 2012 (#)

Nice poem, Shaun. Thank you for sharing.

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author avatar Denise O
8th Feb 2012 (#)

You g=have such a way with words and you know what, I like it! Nice one. Thank you for sharing.:)

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author avatar Funom Makama
8th Feb 2012 (#)

Excellent Poem my friend!

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author avatar Curt Mongold
8th Feb 2012 (#)

I like the way you express yourself and the emotions in this work are keenly felt. If a grade were applicable, I would give you a B!

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author avatar Christine Crowley
8th Feb 2012 (#)

Oh No! Please feel better! I am in the same "boat". Love lost. But I am going on. You should also.

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author avatar Md Rezaul Karim
9th Feb 2012 (#)

I remember the band called six feet under.... I thought it's about them.. now see it's better than them!

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author avatar ShaneCold
9th Feb 2012 (#)

Wonderful words. I like d emotions portrayed by this classic.

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author avatar Sheila Newton
9th Feb 2012 (#)

Oh, this is SO sad. The writer is SO wounded. Beautiful language.

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author avatar Ivyevelyn, R.S.A.
10th Feb 2012 (#)

Is Shaunak dead?

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author avatar Shaunak
10th Feb 2012 (#)

Not yet!!! Am still alive n kickin...

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author avatar Ivyevelyn, R.S.A.
10th Feb 2012 (#)

Shaunak: I thought my last comment would bring you around. Anyway, what are doing alive? Did you lead us up the garden path?

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author avatar Shaunak
10th Feb 2012 (#)

No! just waiting to die in my next Poem!

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author avatar Delicia Powers
10th Feb 2012 (#)

imagery resounding and haunting....

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author avatar Ivyevelyn, R.S.A.
10th Feb 2012 (#)

Shaunak: Expect a lot of comments coming in to you; you were very convincing. Maybe I will try a 'dying scenario'.

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author avatar aakriti
25th Apr 2012 (#)

very touching.Very beautiful poetry. Such wonderful words

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