The Inheritance

SiddiQ By SiddiQ, 3rd Nov 2010 | Follow this author | RSS Feed | Short URL http://nut.bz/.ua445gw/
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This is a story I had a written for my English class. I decided it was pretty good and so I thought I'd share it on Wikinut.

The Murder

I didn't know about the murder until late in the afternoon.
Our housemaid was busy cleaning out the garage when she noticed that one of the garbage bags lying in the corner had procured an odd shape. Despite the stench, she got close to it and opened up the bag--only to be met by a horrible surprise.

The moment I found out about Grandpa Joe's murder, I called my two aunts and uncle who happened to live close by. They arrived in seconds. That is when I found out about the inheritance.

A Mixture of Relief and Pain

After Grandpa Joe would pass away, my dad (who was on a business trip in Costa Rica), my aunts Miriam and Mary and uncle Sean would get an equal share of the property.
Aunt Mary blamed the murder on the inheritance. I didn't want to think like that because if that was true, then it could also mean that one of us could be the culprit.
*****
As the day drew to a close, tensions rose high.
After the funeral, my aunts, my uncle and I were seated in the dark, uninviting living room, trying our level best to bring out a subject.
Aunt Miriam tried talking about her work and how her business was going. However, that subject didn't last long.

Aunt Mary had cooked up a fresh batch of cookies--my favourite cookies. But none of us felt like eating. Now, the cookies were seated next to us, as if trying to accept Grandpa Joe's death.

Uncle Sean talked about how he last saw Grandpa Joe about to drive to the pharmacist.
After a while, Uncle Sean silently left without saying a word. I heard him walk upstairs.

And then, something clicked inside me. My eyes burst open wide. I couldn't believe it! Startling my aunts, I jumped up from my seat, ran to the phone and dialed 911
"Hello police!" I said. "I need help! I know who murdered Joe Shaak Elaha! It was my uncle! I'll explain later! Just come and hurry!"

Three Weeks Earlier... (Past)

Grandpa Joe was humming a tune while I sat in the passengers seat while Dad sat at the back.
I was nervously thumping my fingers on the dashboard.

We were driving to the video shop. We had decided to rent out a movie of my choice and then watch while eating pizza, also of my choice.
I was feeling quite sleepy but my eyes snapped open when I caught site of the child crossing the street in front of us.

"Grandpa!" I shouted. "Child!"
Granpa immediately stomped down on the brakes, just inches near the child.
"I knew I shouldn't have been behind the wheel," Grandpa cried. "My eye sight isn't good enough anymore!"

From that moment on, Grandpa never even looked at a steering wheel again.

Reasons (Present)

Grandpa Joe would never drive.
He would either get one of us to drive, walk or take a taxi.
Also, why would Granpa Joe go to the pharmacist? He was perfectly alright. And if he wasn't, he would have told us.
Why would Uncle Sean lie to us that Grandpa Joe was going to drive to the pharmacist when he would never drive nor would he need to go to the pharmacist?
Uncle Sean was hiding something.

When Uncle Sean came downstairs, he was pretty surprised to half a dozen policemen glaring at him, pistols drawn.

"Sean Shaak Elaha!" one of the police officers began. "You are under arrest for the murder of Joe Shaak Elaha!"

Uncle Sean immediately confessed right away.
He said that Grandpa Joe had decided to give him nothing. Uncle Sean admitted that he was involved in drugs and Grandpa Joe had somehow found out. In anger and greed, he was forced to take his own father's life.
Uncle Sean showed no resistance as the police handcuffed him and escorted him out.

Even thought the mystery over, my fear was not.
If such a wise man as Uncle Sean had gone to such an extent just because of greed, how long before another one of us follow the same, dark path.

More From SiddiQ

Read more of my stories:
The Ghost and the Guardian
The Monstrosity of Mayshire series
The Clown
The Cursed Farm
The Late Night Intruder series
The German Shepherd
The Cemetery Series

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Aunt, Grandpa, Horror Stories, Inheritence, Money, Short Stories, Uncle, Wise Man

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Where there is horror, I'm there!
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author avatar ppruel
3rd Nov 2010 (#)

so it was you friend, who found the murderer! I like the way you tell the tale...

my prayers to your grandpa.

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author avatar SiddiQ
3rd Nov 2010 (#)

Thanks...but the story isn't real. I made it up. My character name in the story was Dean. ;)

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author avatar Paul Lines
3rd Nov 2010 (#)

Great story well told

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author avatar SiddiQ
4th Nov 2010 (#)

Thanks, Paul!

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author avatar Claerwyn Anwylaeth
4th Nov 2010 (#)

Hey, just have a couple of pointers (but over all, I liked your plot concept and found the story easy to follow). Maybe "showing" rather than "telling" would help get your story across; such that you describe what happens, rather than going " and then this happened. And this." Overall, a great effort :)

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author avatar SiddiQ
4th Nov 2010 (#)

I guess I could implement these. Thanks!

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author avatar Denise O
4th Nov 2010 (#)

SiddiQ, it has been so nice to see you grow as a writer here on wikinut. Good job!
Thank you for sharing.:)

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author avatar SiddiQ
4th Nov 2010 (#)

Thank you for the support! Appreciate it! ;)

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author avatar ppruel
5th Nov 2010 (#)

i am 101% sure that you can implement showing than telling. you already done it at your other stories. remember monstrosity? it was coupled with actions, dialogue and thoughts.

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author avatar SiddiQ
5th Nov 2010 (#)

Yes, 'The Monstrosity of Mayshire' series were made interesting because I showed the drama rather than tell it. Claerwyn's idea is not bad at all!
Thanks ppruel and Claerwyn!

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author avatar Wahid maqsood
25th Nov 2010 (#)

excellent work siddiq!! dude! awesome!

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author avatar SiddiQ
25th Nov 2010 (#)

Thanks

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author avatar Humza
29th Nov 2010 (#)

writing mysteries , suspense stories has always been way toooo difficult for me infact almost impossible but the way u do it its mashallah too impressive and inspiring. i suggest that just like ur "writing magic" article do write"on the magic of writing such stories" as well i am in dire need of that magic!
keep it up bro!

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author avatar SiddiQ
29th Nov 2010 (#)

Hopefully, the magic shall be at your benefit ;) Good luck. Thanks!

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author avatar christopheranton
16th Dec 2010 (#)

That was first class.
Congratulations. I shall have to read
some more of them when I get
a little time.

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author avatar SiddiQ
16th Dec 2010 (#)

Thanks, Chris!

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