The dark water that surrounds me

krrymarie By krrymarie, 24th Jan 2012 | Follow this author | RSS Feed
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These words just came to me as hereiam picked the title, the dark waters under the surface, but as i got writing I changed the title to the dark water that surrounds me and the words just flowed.

The dark water that surrounds me

Standing on the bridge looking down,
at the deep murky waters below,
It's such a long way down.
Do I jump or do I not?
If I do will I drown, or
will I survive and see another day?
I hope, I drown, as full of sorrow I am
I cannot bare this life of mine,
not even for one more day.

Standing on the bridge,
drawing a deep breath,
Counting to ten
with my eyes shut tight,
so I cannot see, the water below me.
Swirling around as the current is so strong
I jump right in!

Going down faster and faster,
hit the surface with a splash,
as I go under the cold murky water,
which pulls me deeper down.

I cannot see, I cannot breath,
I can only but think,
as I see my life pass me by
the deeper down, I go.

I stop getting pulled under,
by the cold murky water that surrounds me,
as I hit, the dark surface below
which feels like sand to touch.

I lay there, watching more of my life pass me by,
Those happy memories that were hidden from me,
wondering why they were, as the sad ones took over,
ruined my life forever more.

Wishing I hadn't jumped at all
As life could get better after all,
I just needed to get help,
to make me see life, can be
wonderful after all.

Did I really drown, or did I survive?
Perhaps no one would ever know,
unless they dive to the, bottom of the,
deep dark water that may surround me.

Krrymarie 24.1.12

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Depression, Poem, Poetry, Poetry About Life, Poetry On Life, Poetry With Meaning, Sad, Suicide

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author avatar krrymarie
I am new to all this, I enjoy writing poetry, haiku's and and anything that interests me in general.
I enjoy poetry, reading, photography, listening to music of all kinds, playing world of war craft.

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author avatar Buzz
25th Jan 2012 (#)

Kerry, what a shivering thought but a beautiful poem! Thank you for sharing.

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author avatar Songbird B
25th Jan 2012 (#)

Very powerful and emotive Kerry..This is an inspired write..Vivid and dark, yet beautiful in its creative flow..Well done my friend..

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author avatar krrymarie
25th Jan 2012 (#)

Thank you so much, I enjoyed writing this and was pleased with how it came out.

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author avatar Jerry Walch
25th Jan 2012 (#)

Kerry. there is nothing that I can say about this poem that Buzz ans Songbird B. haven't already said.

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author avatar krrymarie
25th Jan 2012 (#)

Thank you Jerry Glad you enjoyed, I have been using grammar expert plus which helped no end.

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author avatar ppruel
25th Jan 2012 (#)

pains challenge and complete life. good piece my friend.

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author avatar Amit13
25th Jan 2012 (#)

very nice

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author avatar Tranquilpen
25th Jan 2012 (#)

A well constructed, thought provoking read my friend. Thank you for sharing it.

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author avatar krrymarie
25th Jan 2012 (#)

Thank you guys glad you enjoyed.

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author avatar Denise O
26th Jan 2012 (#)

Krrymarie, just a lovely dark work of art. You know she is drowning yet, it is so peaceful and you are mesmerized. Just lovely. Thank you for sharing.:)

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author avatar M. Kari Barr
26th Jan 2012 (#)

Nice sudden inspiration ...

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author avatar krrymarie
26th Jan 2012 (#)

Thank you Denise for dropping by
My next poems gotta be just as good lol!!!

Thank you M kari

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author avatar hereiam
28th Jan 2012 (#)

I liked this Kerry and I cant believe I didn't say anything, I thought I did

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author avatar krrymarie
31st Jan 2012 (#)

Thank you hereiam I know when you first read it it made you feel depressed!! but the words just flowed and its the way it came out! glad you enjoyed it though.

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author avatar Sivaramakrishnan A
8th Feb 2012 (#)

We all feel like taking the plunge once in a while but what lies ahead or below is the question mark! siva

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author avatar Jack Necron
16th Feb 2012 (#)

Hauntingly beautiful and dreamlike in quality. I also like the mystery at the end, an unanswered cliffhanger. Well done and thanks for sharing.

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author avatar krrymarie
16th Feb 2012 (#)

Thank you Jack. I was really pleased with how this one turned out.

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author avatar Christine Crowley
16th Feb 2012 (#)

I actually shivered when I read this. What a beautiful, haunting poem. You have real talent!

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author avatar krrymarie
16th Feb 2012 (#)

Thank you Christine.

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author avatar Yvonnek
26th Mar 2012 (#)

I enjoyed this very much.

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author avatar krrymarie
2nd Oct 2012 (#)

Thank you Yvonnnek sorry for late reply

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