The unforgettable kind Cowgirl

Rathnashikamani By Rathnashikamani, 11th Jun 2011 | Follow this author | RSS Feed | Short URL http://nut.bz/3g3uk6ry/
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This is a poem I wrote on Yahoo Answers, as an answer to a question asking for a poem using these words:
1- A herd of goats
2- A white horse
3- two wildcats
4- A dog
5- A cowgirl
6- A pizza hut

Please critique this story poem.

The unforgettable and kind Cowgirl

On one sunny afternoon-
A beautiful cowgirl, riding on a white horse
that galloped gallantly down the hill,
rushed to me sitting at a pizza hut
among the morons of the countryside

Jumping off the horse back
she took out her pistol and aimed at my heart
and told me that I was the rascal

I was aghast with a surprise
to see such a delicate woman holding a rugged gun
in a tight clench of her tender fist

Her lips were twisted in an anger
that was unnatural but
evident on allover her moon-like face
and it looked so abnormal a grimace


And then-
All on a sudden she began crying
and uttered with a sobbing voice
and looked so desolate.
I was puzzled to the core of my reason
unknown of her peculiar behavior

She told me that she was helpless,
but pushed me to the ground kicking on my knee

Then I fell on my butt
and got hurt by the sharp stones
that lay all over the dirty ground

She then minced the words 'Get up'
and abruptly in a screech of the vibrating loud voice
she called me 'Rascal' and signaled to follow her,
this time the gun was pointed on my right temple

I sulkily moved
in the direction she ambled upon her horse;
I could not imagine what crime I committed
and I could not recall seeing her before!

The unforgettable and kind Cowgirl...

Soon we reached a vast land with a pasture
where a herd of goats were grazing
and I could spot a dog
barking and threatening two wildcats

And there was a lamb
almost dying
with a deep cut on its throat

Then I knew quickly
how my dog would have hunted the newborn
with its spiky canines
digging into its flail pharynx

The cats were purring to keep the dog away
as the dog did not move an inch back
but glanced at the blood-trickling lamb

I realized my mistake
and was amazed at the mercy of the cowgirl
for not killing my dog

She was so kind i thought
as she didn't want to kill my beast

The dog was, in fact, so hungry,
as I did not feed it from the morn
And it was me who let it lose
as I was playing cards at the pizza hut.

Her pretended anger could not be hidden
she could not be so wild to have an intention to kill me
as she was full of mercy and kindness towards the dog
that almost killed the lamb in its rising hunger.

I was helpless and full of guilt
and I knelt on the ground
and in words that came out from my heart
I said 'I'm sorry' and 'I should not have done this'

She did not stop sobbing
but she took the lamb in her arms
now it was totally dead
and the bleeding ceased from its throat.

I was broken to take that lamb
and hugged it to my heart
as my dog still looked with its hungry eyes
and dribbling tongue.

Without another word
She rode away on the horse-back
as the goats followed her
escorted by the wild cats.

I was moved by her strange act
but my dog was expectant of the tender meat
followed me, wagging its tail and whining in joy

And I dug up a hole on the hillside;
with tears welling out from my eyes
I bode farewell to the lamb
as I interred its limp dead body

The unforgettable and kind Cowgirl...

That was a sad incident I never forget
and the world remembers the kindness
of that young lady even now, for in the hills
at the top you can witness her statue
and read her moonface and feel
her compassion ever present.

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Image credits:
Cowgirl on a white horse: Charles Marion Russell , via Wikimedia Commons
Dog barking: By U.S. Air Force Photo by Josh Plueger , via Wikimedia Commons
Statue of the unforgettable cowgirl: By Billy Hathorn via Wikimedia Commons


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author avatar James R. Coffey
11th Jun 2011 (#)

A remarkable poem! And a most enjoyable read!

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
12th Jun 2011 (#)

Thanks, my friend.

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author avatar Denise O
11th Jun 2011 (#)

With your talent, you just give you a list and you come up with this, great. Only one mistake and that is, you wrote rears, instead of tears. Nicely done. Thank you for sharing.:)

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
12th Jun 2011 (#)

You've a keen eye for 'tears'!

I linked them to this page.

Thanks my friend.

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author avatar Delicia Powers
11th Jun 2011 (#)

Truly creative, well done!

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
12th Jun 2011 (#)

Thanks Delicia,
for the kind comments.

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author avatar Steve Kinsman
11th Jun 2011 (#)

Well, you did it! You got them all in, Rathnashikamani. Wonderful job, great poem - every word held my total interest all the way through.

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
12th Jun 2011 (#)

Thanks Steve for stopping by.
And I am glad you like it.

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author avatar Maria Malone
12th Jun 2011 (#)

Well done Rath, that was not an easy task to do!

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
12th Jun 2011 (#)

Thanks to you Maria,
Your words inspire me a lot.

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author avatar Minakshi
12th Jun 2011 (#)

Realy interesting.....the story expressed in poetic way is appreciable and touching.

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author avatar Retired
12th Jun 2011 (#)

A fascinating read Rath. Thank you

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author avatar Buzz
12th Jun 2011 (#)

I salute you on this one, my friend. Your use of words whip me into a frenzy as usual.

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author avatar Songbird B
12th Jun 2011 (#)

So clever, Rath,great poem too..I stand in awe of your ability my friend...

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author avatar Retired
12th Jun 2011 (#)

Beautifully artistic verse. Thanks!

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author avatar vpaulose
12th Jun 2011 (#)

Interesting facts about loving animals. thank you Rathna.

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author avatar Soc
13th Jun 2011 (#)

Wow - within the parameters I would never have come up with your poem - you have a keen imiagination

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
13th Jun 2011 (#)

Minakshi, Lewis, Jimmy, Songbird, Mike, vpaulose & Socrates, all dear friends,

Thank you all for your kind words and appreciation.

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author avatar richardpeeej
15th Jun 2011 (#)

A very unusual and unique take on writing a poem Rath. Keep it up and please write some more.

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
15th Jun 2011 (#)

Thank you richardpeeej,
I'm inspired by your comments.

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author avatar polaris77
17th Jun 2011 (#)

That's truly an original approach on poetry!

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
28th Jun 2011 (#)

Thanks to you my friend, for your time and comment.

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author avatar Retired
28th Jun 2011 (#)

Quite remarkable and original indeed.

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author avatar Rathnashikamani
28th Jun 2011 (#)

Again Namaste,
I'm blessed by your kindness.

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